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soesacall
05-08-2014, 08:34 PM
I met a rose on may way to the mountain
She smiled and said good morning
I said where you got all this charm?
She danced and said come near
I said where you got all this fragrance
She told me touch me my dear
I said where you got all this beautiful touch!
She told me hug me
Show me your love
Get closer get closer
I picked her from her branches
She said you killed me stranger
I saw the dew on her petal as her tears
I sighed what I did? What I did?
She told me do not cry
The lives of roses are too short
I kissed her
I hugged her
Prayed and said good bye

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double moo
05-08-2014, 09:23 PM
Definite candidate for Platinum Level....